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[Morgoth]

Dear Boy,

I hold your face so close to heart
I hate it when we are apart.

You cannot realise how I feel
How I gaze upon you with such zeal.

I could not tell you, what would I say
How I love you more each day.

Why, oh why? It is not fair
I'd run my fingers through your hair.

Touch your face, oh so fine
I just wish I could call you mine.

Boy, you mean so much to me-
let me go, set me free.

What have I done to warrant this?
me and you would equal bliss.

I love you boy, I really do
I only wish... that you knew.

To hear you say my name, so sweet
I worship the shoes that grace your feet...

(well everyone, as you can tell, I really like this guy... and this is my crappy attempt at expressing some of these pent-up emotions adolescence has given me... just tell me what you think, be candid, I want the truth ya'll...)

[ara46]

wow..Morgoth.thats better then I could have done any day at expressing my emotions.it's very good.

[Goldmoon]

Morgoth, what an inspiring poem. This boy you speak of, perhaps you should give this poem to him and let him read it. It is a wonderful way of telling someone how you truly feel. Your rhyming was great and the words very well used. I like the way that your words spoke of love for another, a really nice job.

[Morgoth]

thanks, Ara and Goldie... I'm not really that good at this stuff... I wish I could give it to the guy I wrote it about.. but that would probably just freak him out.. oh well... hey, anyone have any suggestions for finding a muse? I don't really have one, as far as I know... (other than this guy I wrote the poem about)

[Morgoth]

Another attempt at some sorta poetry.. or something like that...
One Frosty Morn

The sky is grey,
the ground is coated with a layer of ice.
No school today,
I love it, so very nice.

Pellets of froz'n
water do fall.
Creating for plants
a cold glassy shawl.

A frosty Morn,
for all to enjoy.
Old and newborn,
men, women, girl and boy.

A slippery layer
that coats the ground
turning to slush
falling all around...

A crystal tree
a glass evergreen
and a warm, toasty me
liking what I've seen...

On this frosty day
a book by the fire
and cups of cocoa
are enjoyed in peace.

[Morgoth]

Here's another I wrote... Although there is beauty in winter, it is inevitable that there is a darker side to it....

In the treetop...
Creaking, groaning, shrieking, crying
underneath the ice we're dying
laden with this heavy stuff
will we have strength enough?
My boughs are weary, bark is brittle
why can't it just melt a little?
My brothers creak, sometimes fall
mighty oaks no longer tall.
Pressure builds as ice piles on
A resounding crack and limbs are gone...

I liked how it ended, rather abruptly, like how a limb falls from a tree with little warning except for the groans of the wood bending....

[Morgoth]

(hey, would anyone like to tell me how to take a link :
and name it, so you can click on the name, instead of having the whole link there? like if I wanted to name
www.lotrplaza.com/forum/display_topic_threads.asp?ForumID=26&TopicID=166377&PagePosition=1 that link "Mairu's Madness" or something like that? On the plaza's what I'm asking about... I've seen people do it, so perhaps onna them could explain how.. )
<timeloop edit: I checked out the link thingy on the profile page on the plaza, but that didn't help me, cuz I tried it, and it didn't work, for my profile, at least...>

[Morgoth]

(I'm in a bit of a bad mood, so my stuff might seem a bit... I dunno... just not a happy poem, let me tell ya that)

I walk outside and fall on the ground
my legs can't carry this burden
the snow covers my body as it
falls from the sky, little snowflakes
that drift to my eye.
Into my nostrils,
I can't breath
they clog my throat
with their cold
I gasp for air
as I reach out for you
but you've gone and
I can't see your face
or your happy smile
and I feel despair
that I may never see
you, my love, again
but I've got to stay,
to live, for you
if only to see your
beautiful smile
once more.

(ah, a buncha spur-of-the-moment crap... oh well, I like the theme of snow killing me... I mean that in a poetic sense... maybe ^x^ )

[Goldmoon]

First off the link thing, Cae is very good at it. Me, i'm still getting the hang of it to. Sorry. Now for your peoms. Frosty Morn, was an very nice one, i love the snow and the freshness it brings to the earth. You describe events i really enjoy in there during the cold months.
Now the untitled one..Well it speaks of one who would like to be buried in the snow and not care if forgotten about. Nicely done and put together even if it's only ebil thoughts, still done with finess.

[Morgoth]

danke sehr, Goldie. I think the last one was written when I was tired of everyone's crap, and tired of being ignored.. or something like that, but as I said, I wasn't in a good mood at all. I think I might be visiting this thread less, as I've got my thread on the plaza, and that is what I'm using as my medium more than here. I will post here and there, but quite sporadically, so don't hold your breath, unless you really want to.

[Giliathriel Alquasilme]

I really liked Frosty Morn too, very well detailed! Much more than I could ever achieve! The other ones are just a little dark, but still cool! (I like dark stuff) I know how you feel, to have to take out your agressions on something.... *evil grin while looking at sister*

[Morgoth]

Well, here's a poem fragment, I haven't taken the time to go and make it into a full-fledged poem. And I kinda forgot it, but hopefully it'll come to me soon....
ok... I think I've got it now.

I hear the sound of applause
when nobody's
there.

Hehe, it's horrible, so maybe I won't even try and make it a poem. oh well!

[Caewýn Alquasilme]

wow, the simplicity of your poetry, the sheer raw honesty that leaves nothing unturned, nowhere to hide, makes for a powerful read. The added rhyming as well, further emphasies the way you are feeling and makes it come across very strongly. Fabulous, keep it up and I'll try and check your plaza thread too as some stage (add it on to my list of about 50 threads!)

[Fiwen Brandybuck]

You are very good at expressing emotions in your poetry (I am getting very good at analyzing poetry as we have to do this for one of our English exams), and they are very descriptive. Keep them coming, and I'd like to see you turn that last one into a poem. *g*