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Post by nina on Jan 22, 2005 7:28:23 GMT 10
Hey, this thread will for me be a kind of collection, some poems is old written years ago in my darkest hours, some written today, and some have been posted on the plaza before, but i am gonna post them in here, so i hope you'll enjoy them please leave a comment or two, 'cause critics makes me better. this is the first one!!
Icecold voices whispers slowly
Calling me home
Sending me away
Reaches out
Runs away
Yells, screams
Whispers, crys
Wish to live
Hopes to die
My confusing mind
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Post by Morgoth on Jan 23, 2005 11:14:40 GMT 10
nice, Nisira. "whispers" shouldn't be plural though, I don't think <Golds Edit. Mo hows come no idea on the thought of poem? Hmm ponders.>  |
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Post by ara46 on Feb 2, 2005 4:40:45 GMT 10
very nice Nisira! I thought I'd put a word in and give you a thumbs up.  |
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Post by Goldmoon on Mar 8, 2005 13:57:17 GMT 10
Nisira, This small but rather unique (prose) poem seems to be a undecided mind not knowing where to go.Very short and descreet but letting all know that perhaps you are afraid of these things. No rhyming and i get a feeling that these thoughts are maybe a situation of reality?
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Post by Caewýn Alquasilme on Mar 25, 2005 17:46:46 GMT 10
wow, I'm really loving how strong and straight down the line this is, so direct, and because you relate it to 'I', the personal, makes it even more effective. Wonderful work, cannot wait to see more from you! (and loving that avatar *g*)
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